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The Other Side of The Room by ~xsinsx:iconxsinsx:



it never fails to escape my notice that;


i.
the rattling of the windows makes her
want a little less, but a little more.
she always tries to step it up,
but her arms (today) are rather sore.
it doesn't matter;
yet
she likes feeling safe.
windows; the memories chafe;
remind her of him. and how
he'd just climb in.

ii.
her phone rings, like the silver circlet enthroned
on her ankle. rings and clings; but who phoned?
even as the bells
move slightly in time with her footsteps;
and the button is nearly as
depressed as her when she has to ask 'Who's this?'
she likes knowing who calls,
maybe he will.
maybe,
she will.

iii.
everytime she picks out a dress,
more care than she'd
(confess)
tell me.
red pink blue green.
something new, he hasn't seen.
save this for the summer.
puts it back on
(only for him)
the rack.

iv.
she loves him.

v.
she says his name with
a little less reverence, a little more
longing.
maybe she should tell him.
maybe he
(doesn't want her)
already knows.
she braids her hair for bed, two little,
knobs on her head, so in the morning
into flowing curls it'd settle,
long and loving.
©2009 ~xsinsx
:iconxsinsx:

Author's Comments

the original title was:

reflections from the other side of the room.

but it wouldn't fit.

dedicated to my ex-roommate and best friend kiran.

history bores me sometimes.

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:iconxxxexsanguinationxxx:
You've quite the mind for poetry. I like the lack of rhymingg in some places. Because the ideas still fit together well. It's beautifull.

--
she takes P-H-O-T-O-G-R-A-P-H-S of people she knows.
she brings out the best and worst in them.
x Erase me, erase me, I\'m Gone. My feet find the freeway, I run.

TOASTER LOVE. :toaster: + :plug:
:iconxsinsx:
thank you >:3

i'm always quite the stickler for rhyming and had in fact tried to write this one without any rhyming at all.
i failed at that, but overall i like the effect it achieved.
though i had to undergo intense rhyme therapy later.

thanks for the fave bahbeh <3

--
My parachute didn't open, and when my back up failed.
Pixie dust prevailed.
:iconxxxexsanguinationxxx:
Lol. Rhyming isnt bad. Especially when mixed with non-rhym likee in this one.
I agree bout the effect.
Just made for a great poem<33

THERAPY?
...did joo get cookies and a sticker?

XDD No problem, lovee.

--
she takes P-H-O-T-O-G-R-A-P-H-S of people she knows.
she brings out the best and worst in them.
x Erase me, erase me, I\'m Gone. My feet find the freeway, I run.

TOASTER LOVE. :toaster: + :plug:

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